Saturday, November 2, 2013

Carpe Diem's Tan Renga Challenge Month #II Mark M. Redfearn's "by the garden path"



by the garden path
an upside down flowerpot
cottage for a toad
(Mark M. Redfearn)

the toad’s too lazy to jump
pond rests in tranquillity

sad song of the rippling rain
but toad hears a happy tune



4 comments:

  1. the toad is sleeping in, I guess, but at least he's happy,,

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  2. i love how you show different attitudes in both completion. very nice

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  3. Nice to see you here again Lothar, that second two-line stanza (sad song of the rippling rain but toad hears a happy tune) is the most in balance with the haiku, and that makes the Tan Renga complete.

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  4. Enjoyed both completions.
    #2 is the one I favor.
    Peace
    Siggi

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